Some observations: * in "realms of men and beast" it should probably be "man" (or "beasts") * comma missing before "or anything else the player can come up with" * it should be "then they are trapped" and "until said collar" * Flying and Swimmer has "land speed", while Runner has "land-speed" * comma to full stop after "War Mount's" (at least it looks like a comma) * full stop missing after "increases to 12" * full stop missing after "the size of a wolf" * full stop missing after "increases by one step" in Predator * full stop missing after "normal form" in Sneak * comma missing from "and Runner" in Regius * in "use of ones hands" it should be "one's" in Regius * comma missing before "or absorbing and dropping equipment" in Regius * comma missing before "and Sneak" in Dominus * full stop missing after "some form of natural armor" in Dominus * full stop missing after "monstrous attribute" in Dominus * "Sneak, Swimmer, Flyer" should be "Sneak, Swimmer, and Flyer" in Multis * "heart" should probably be "Heart" (or "Hearts") in Multis
Gerblargh, Transformation requires a single combat round - I gotta go back and fix that in the main text.
ReplyDeleteBut you know, this looks fantastic.
ReplyDeleteVery cool.
ReplyDeleteAn insect animal form would be good too!
ReplyDeleteSome observations:
ReplyDelete* in "realms of men and beast" it should probably be "man" (or "beasts")
* comma missing before "or anything else the player can come up with"
* it should be "then they are trapped" and "until said collar"
* Flying and Swimmer has "land speed", while Runner has "land-speed"
* comma to full stop after "War Mount's" (at least it looks like a comma)
* full stop missing after "increases to 12"
* full stop missing after "the size of a wolf"
* full stop missing after "increases by one step" in Predator
* full stop missing after "normal form" in Sneak
* comma missing from "and Runner" in Regius
* in "use of ones hands" it should be "one's" in Regius
* comma missing before "or absorbing and dropping equipment" in Regius
* comma missing before "and Sneak" in Dominus
* full stop missing after "some form of natural armor" in Dominus
* full stop missing after "monstrous attribute" in Dominus
* "Sneak, Swimmer, Flyer" should be "Sneak, Swimmer, and Flyer" in Multis
* "heart" should probably be "Heart" (or "Hearts") in Multis