Column Culling

Dear Readers, I am at a slight impasse and could use your input.

Long story short; Each Calling in Break!! has a list of origins. These are here to help define who your character was before the start of the game. It gives you your Purviews (Abstract skill groupings really, generally there for you to score bonuses when they apply) and some bonus starting gear. It also comes with a (hopefully) cool name to write on your sheet.

There is also a description included. My hope was this would help jog player creativity or at least provide some clarity in case there wasn't some. One of my early proofreaders pointed out that really, that job could be covered by Purviews and that the Description was potentially superfluous.

I think I agree with her.

(Please note we are still in draft, so the text in the below entries will likely change here and there)

Warrior Origins (With Description)

d12	Occupation	Description	Purviews	Starting Gear
1	Ronin	You are a wanderer without home or cause. While freedom has its benefits, it doesn’t pay well - you may be adventuring just to get some food. Being a sellsword has taught as how to maneuver through  tense situations without giving yourself away, as well as managing on your own without much help.	Cheaply maintaining gear, judging another’s motives and hiding your own, intense stare downs	Long Grip Weapon, Traveler's Bag and a suit of Skirmisher Armor
2	Gladiator	Once you were owned and made to fight for sport. You were freed by your deeds in the arena (or by your former master’s lifeblood) and have now turned your back on the past, though not on the skills that make you who you are.	Bloody Spectacle, Intimidation and other loud forms of communication, sizing up other fighters	A Chain weapon, Skirmisher Armor and a Net
3	Barbarian	You are from a harsh land or culture, one where might and ruthlessness are the only things that guarantee survival. You also may just be really, really rowdy.	Surviving in the wilderness, Overt displays of strength, Recalling superstitions and ancient tales	A Heavy Weapon, A savage token and a Waterskin.

Warrior Origins (Without Description)

d12	Occupation	Purviews	Starting Gear
1	Ronin	Cheaply maintaining gear, judging another’s motives and hiding your own, intense stare downs	Long Grip Weapon, Traveler's Bag and a suit of Skirmisher Armor
2	Gladiator	Bloody Spectacle, Intimidation and other loud forms of communication, sizing up other fighters	A Chain weapon, Skirmisher Armor and a Net
3	Barbarian	Surviving in the wilderness, Overt displays of strength, Recalling superstitions and ancient tales	A Heavy Weapon, A savage token and a Waterskin.

The One without takes up less space, and allows for more freedom of interpretation with the result. I may need to spruce up the Purviews a bit, but otherwise I think it's a good change. What do you guys think?

EDIT:
Here is what I'm thinking now. I think this is a big improvement, but I've been wrong before. I will likely re-evaluate Purviews a bit as well.

d12	Occupation	Purview	Starting Gear
1	Ronin You once belonged, but those days are gone. Now you are wandering sellsword without home or cause.	Cheaply maintaining gear, judging another’s motives and hiding your own, intense staredowns	Long Grip Weapon, Traveller’s Bag and a suit of Skirmisher Armor
2	Gladiator You were property, forced to fight for the amusement of others. Your freedom was paid for in blood.	Bloody Spectacle, Intimidation and other loud forms of communication, sizing up other fighters	A Chain weapon, Skirmisher Armor and a Net
3	Barbarian You come from harsh, unforgiving lands without civilization. You might also just be very rowdy.	Surviving in the wilderness, Overt displays of strength, Recalling superstitions and ancient tales	A Heavy Weapon, A savage token and a Waterskin.